Page 2: Descriptive Writing - Sunset Scene

This page presents a model answer for a creative writing task, specifically describing a place at sunset. It showcases techniques for descriptive writing tips for sunset scenes.

Key features of the descriptive piece include:

• Vivid imagery of the setting sun and its effects on the environment
• Incorporation of multiple sensory details
• Contrasting descriptions of different groups of people
• Use of figurative language to enhance the description

Example: "The ever-dwindling sun peeks through the many bodies on the street, casting long, warped shadows on the ground."

Highlight: The answer employs extensive and ambitious vocabulary, varied language techniques, and structural features to create a compelling description.

Vocabulary: Cascaded - Fell or poured in a waterfall-like manner.

The examiner's report emphasizes:

• Convincing and compelling communication
• Suitable tone, style, and register for descriptive writing
• Use of extensive and ambitious vocabulary
• Varied language techniques (similes, repetition)
• Description of multiple senses
• Effective use of structural features and paragraph linking

This model answer provides valuable insights for students working on sunset description creative writing tasks and preparing for the AQA English Language Paper 1 creative writing section.

Page 6: Language Analysis

Detailed examination of language techniques, particularly focusing on personification and hyperbole.

Vocabulary: Hyperbole - intentional exaggeration for dramatic effect.

Quote: "streets so smooth and tarred that he itched to lay his cheek down on them"

Highlight: The analysis demonstrates how exaggeration can effectively convey character perspective.